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It reads as if she brought him from Florida, rather than bringing the teeth from Florida.
As intended. But "a handful of smooth black shark's teeth" make the action clear.Of course, I like confusion.Geof
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It reads as if she brought him from Florida, rather than bringing the teeth from Florida.
As intended. But "a handful of smooth black shark's teeth" make the action clear.
Of course, I like confusion.
Geof
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